Recently, I was blown away by Tony Abbot’s Firegirl. It’d been on my reading list for a while now, ever since it won the Golden Kite. Now I understand why it received the award!
This book is an incredible example of voice guiding you through the story. Strangely, the title character is not the first person narrator (Tom), nor even the main character of the book. And yet the book revolves around Firegirl, a girl that has been horribly disfigured in a fire, and explores the way that a single person or single moment in time can define and change us for years to come.
More stunning than the distinctive and strong voice of Tom, is the way that Tony Abbott manages to show Firegirl in a light that always makes us feel empathy, rather than pity. And despite the sensitive subject matter, there is not a moment of cheesiness in this book. How does Abbott manage to do this?
My best guess is that Abbott lets us see Firegirl through the eyes of a teenage boy who is trying hard to find his place in the world. Tom feels both revulsion and sympathy for this girl, without judging either emotion. His flaw is not callousness, but merely that this is the first time he’s ever imagined what it might be like to be someone else. Or what other peoples lives might be like. Tom is struggling with empathy, right in front of our eyes. It is this struggle that makes Firegirl so unique. And also what makes this story such a compelling read.
Posted in Books, I heart this book, Writing
I’m embarrassed to admit that I have not heard of this book until now.
Sounds like it’s beautifully done. I’ll have to read it. Thanks for the review!
It’s a quiet book… my friend Emily described it as having ‘understated emotional depth’ and I think that’s the perfect description. I think you’ll love it:)
Recently, I spent an awesome long weekend at the Society for Children’s Book Writers and Illustrators Summer Conference. Four days of chatting, listening, and dancing with a thousand other people who are used to spending our days in our caves perfecting sentences and sketches. This is a group of people who know that picture books are usually 32 pages, people who nod with understanding when you say YA or MG, people who always always have a pen on them. In other words… it’s heaven.
But what really thrilled me about this year’s conference was how many people were talking excitedly about the changing medium of books. E-books, cross-platform storytelling, and the future of publishing was on everyone’s minds and here’s what I took away from the discussions.
Technology is evolving in a direction that will allow us to tell stories in ways we haven’t even begun to imagine. Websites and enhanced ebooks allow us, as writers and illustrators, to stretch outside the boundaries of pictures and pages. A story can be expanded by creating maps, back stories, and world-building on a website. Characters can exist alongside kids on myspace and facebook and twitter and all the newest interwebs. Author interviews and other innovations can make ebooks a valuable and interesting way to read.
More than that… these things are cheap compared to printed and bound books, and much more in the author’s control. And while fewer gatekeepers might mean lower quality, it also means experimentation, creativity, and (not to sound overdramatic) revolution!
In Jon Scieszka’s talk about telling stories across multiple media formats, he showed numbers for how much time kids spend consuming media. While some people were shocked at the high numbers, I realized that I, myself, usually spent more than the average kid on computers, video games, and listening to music. And that doesn’t upset me. As Jon Scieszka (the former Ambassador for Children’s Literature, no less) said, our job is not to stop kids from using technology, but to teach them how to filter it. How to be media literate.
This summer, for the first time in the writing world, I heard more excitement than fear. More creativity than condemnation. And that set my brain whirling and my heart racing. This is an amazing time to be a writer. For the first time in hundreds of years, books are changing. And we’re the ones writing the story.
Posted in Conference, Nifty happenings, SCBWI, Writing
Agreed! I thought the conference was exceptional this year. I felt like I learned soooooo much, not just about the excitement of emerging technologies but also about craft.
Great pictures, by the way! : )
“Every age thinks they’re the modern age, but we really are.” That’s a line D and I quote all the time from (we think>/i>) a stage production of The House of Mirth–as two gentlemen are strolling down the street admiring the electric lights. Who knows if we’re quoting it correctly, or if that’s even the right play. But we love that feeling!
I also love your caption on the second photo, “Media literate.” Perfect!!!
Isn’t it exciting? I was dead set against e-readers until someone gave me one. Then I discovered just why they’re so good. My whole library can fit in my purse! Amazing!
Yay for technology! And Rita, I love that quote or paraphrase or whatever. It’s kinda like one that I like that I think is by Pliny the Elder… he basically says, “Kids these days…grumble grumble.”
I am so happy to announce the sale of my first novel, The Harbinger! Yay!
It was sold in a 2 book deal to Stacey Barney at Putnam/Penguin. I’ve spent so much time with this story and these characters… now I’m incredibly excited to share them with the world.
And evidently, so is Putnam! Listen to what Publishers Weekly has to say about The Harbinger.
“Putnam Nabs YA Debut
G.P. Putnam’s Sons Books for Young Readers has pre-empted world rights, in what it called a “major” deal, to Sara Wilson Etienne’s debut YA novel, The Harbinger. The acquisition is part of a two-book deal by editor Stacey Barney and agent Michael Bourret of Dystel & Goderich Literary Management. The Harbinger is a paranormal work set in a near-future world in which a diminishing oil supply has led to chaos as cities have fallen prey to mass rioting. The 16-year-old heroine begins the novel trapped in a prisonlike school called Holbrook Academy, where she’s tormented by strange visions. These visions lead her to the Harbinger, who has been sent to destroy the world in order to save it. As fate would have it, our heroine is the only one who can stop the titular being. Putnam is planning a spring 2010 publication. Wilson Etienne studied marine biology and lives in California.”
And while I do have time-travel abilities, the book sadly won’t be coming out until Spring 2012.
And now in true Penguin style, I’m off to celebrate. Waddle, Waddle, Whoooooooosh!
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wooooo! you are /awesome/. congrats and congrats and congrats. i knew you could do it, and now you have!
i will now do the dance of joy.
I’m dropping by to see how awesome you are, and give you a high five. We haven’t met, but you’re married to Tony, so you’re awesomeness is assumed. :)
Thanks all! And yes, I do generally get my awesome cred from Tony:)
Congratulations, Sara! All that hard work paid off! And darn, 2012 seems so far away!
…and to think, we can say “We knew her when…”
We are so proud and so happy for you.
Love, Jana, Chad & Ruby-Kathleen
I would like to see Tony do the dance of joy. (In alternate world gear!!)
Um . . . (deepens voice), you’re kind of a “major” deal . . .
I heart The Harbinger and you!!!!!
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Ditto doing the happy dance of joy. I’ve got Snoopy feet! It’s so wonderful to see good books being sold–very encouraging! Cheers to you, and enjoy the celebrations–you’ve earned it. Congrats!!! :]
This is like winning gold medals at the Olympics. FANTASTIC and AAAAAAAWESOMME. I can’t wait to read it. and I never read, but I’ll definitely read your books.
So happy for you! This news definitely deserves a WOO and a HOO!!!
Thanks for the congrats and kind words from all of you! I’m swooning a bit:)
WOO HOO! This is SOOOO exciting! The way the Publisher’s Weekly blurb is worded (“preempted world rights!” “major deal!”) it makes you sound like the next Stephenie Meyer. May your readership grow that big – and bigger! Congrats again, Sara!
I’m so happy for you, Sara! It was great meeting you this weekend. :)
WOWZERS ! What grand and glorious news announced with such PW pow.
Wonderful Wonderful Wonderful !
xoxox
topangamaria
Congrats
Must make sure to get an autographed copy. Please help my Alzheimers by reminding me when it comes out.
YAYYYYY!!! I’m so excited for you! Congrats again and again.
So awesome! Did you ever know that you’re my hero? You’re everything I wish I could be. I could fly higher than an eagle… cuz Sara, you are the wind beneath my wings :)
Congratulations! I’m soooo happy for you my fellow biologist! Looking forward to Spring 2012 … it’ll be here before you know it! :)
Woohoo! I’m so excited for you. Your book is excellent and so are you!
YAY!!!! OMG this is super excited for you!!! PIE for everyone!
But you have to come up and claim it! CONGRATS!!!! SO AWESOME!
It was great seeing you at the conference, Sara! I can’t get over being ecstatic for you about the sale. In addition to being super awesome, in what sounds like an amazing deal, you’re giving the rest of us hope that if we hang in there, it’ll happen. Enjoy!!! You deserve it!!!!!
Yay! Pie for everyone!
Thanks everyone for so much support and excitement and love, it has truly made this a joyful moment:)
@Ara: I hope that we are all yahooing for you soon:)
Congrats!!! I am so excited for you.
I can’t wait for the book to come out.
Enjoy and bask in all the excitement you deserve it! Did someone say pie?
Today I got out a rag and cleaned off my white board. The wide open surface and blissfully erasable markers make it the perfect tool for me to see my story as one big picture. Once I have it there, I can see where the action falls and whether events should come sooner or later. Where it might be dragging or maybe overwhelming the reader with information.
It’s an interesting exercise, but it can also be a confusing one. Everyone agrees that stories should have a beginning, a middle, and an end. But the theories on just how these should play out are endless and often contradictory. People write whole books on the subject, make their living teaching seminars about it, and create graphs detailing just how and when tension should rise or fall.
These differing pictures of plot are confusing enough without even mentioning three act structure or the hero’s journey or A and B plots.
The truth is that each book is different and plot often can’t be distilled down to an x and y axis. But it’s still important that we ask ourselves: How do we keep the tension going in a story? How do we hook the reader over and over so that they keep reading? How do we divvy out information? How do we reveal secrets? Which scenes do we show and which do we skip over?

Pacing and tension are some of the most challenging things to do in a book and though editors might be able to help you shore up your story structure, you’ll never get that help if an editor isn’t interested enough to read your book in the first place. So I keep some personal rules in mind.
Graphs and theories can be infinitely helpful tools when it comes to creating novels. But the key is to listen to your story and trust that it will find its own way through. Beginning. Middle. And End.
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Great post. I especially like the white-board idea–so simple I may have to go out and get one myself. You might like this post I did–similar stuff from a visual perspective: http://www.kidbeowulf.com/?p=1771
Nice! I love seeing the visual equivalent of revision. And I’m envious! It’s very powerful to be able to _see_ changes as they happen and why they happen. Sigh. All I can show is heavy-duty drafts piling up:)
Oh! and definitely get yourself a white-board! You won’t regret it:)
It sounds so simple. Thanks Sara for distilling this confusing process down to easily actionable points. I am running out to get my white board today!
Little do you know that I’m in the pocket of the erasable marker companies! We thank you for your patronage;)
The problem can be the solution. You’ve mentioned this before, and I’m so glad I read this before an upcoming workshop. Now I can ask the writers, “What seems to be the problem?”
Thanks, Sara, and have a Happy Fourth!
Funny. I wrote my own writing guide down today, listing the guiding points I remind myself of over and over as I make my way through my manuscript. In case I ever wanted to hand them out (or in case I ever forgot!).
I should post them online!
Your “the problem can be the solution” is one of my favorites. :D
Awesome! If you do end up writing them down, you should put a link here in the comments so people can look at both:)
Why do I get the feeling you were thinking of me when you wrote “Be mean to your characters”? ;)
Excellent post. Great writing rules!
I love the notion of characters being “volatile chemicals” who will “find their own way through the plot.” That’s awesome. And so are you!
Namaste and a Hug,
Lee
Thanks to Lee Wind for tweeting this post. Excellent insight. And you are so right when you write: “Graphs and theories can be infinitely helpful tools when it comes to creating novels. But the key is to listen to your story and trust that it will find its own way through.” Thanks for that much needed reminder as I set aside my “structure” and dive head first into my 3rd novel.
Writing a new story is like inhabiting a new world. It doesn’t matter whether you’re writing about high school crushes or aliens or high school crushes on aliens, there are strangers you’ve never met, unfamiliar landscapes, traditions you don’t yet understand. And the trick is, you don’t just need to get to know this new world, you have to make it come to life in full technicolor glory.
Some people suggest that when writing crucial scenes in your book, you should employ at least three out of the five senses. As in: “Sara listened to the computer hum impatiently while she tried to think of a good example. She stalled, grimacing as she took a gulp of bitter coffee-gone-cold. The shiny, smooth keys of her computer beckoned her to be brilliant, but alas, she wrote this instead.”
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his is a great technique and I like to expand it to the story creation process. Because unless the world feels real to you, in all five senses, it’s not going to feel real to the reader. Bringing your fiction into the physical world anchors you in your character’s voice and setting in a way that nothing else does. So in the past I’ve talked about building dioramas, collecting shoe boxes full of stuff my character loves, and, most importantly for me, finding a soundtrack to my story.
In my last project, I incessantly listened to the soundtrack to Battlestar Galactica, letting its Taiko drums and wailing flutes build tension and tone in my writing space. I can’t help but feel that the words are infused with a sense of that music, much like honey is flavored by the flowers that bees visit.
So when I started a new story, I felt lost without music for my new world. I started avidly listening to the radio, asking friends what they were listening to, paying attention to soundtracks in movies. At the same time, I was searching for the voice of my main character. For a while, writing was frustrating, my words feeling more like an outline than a book. Then I found Sigur Ros.
This Icelandic band has a raw tone that feels bleak and wistful and, occasionally, soaringly hopeful. The first song I heard by them stunned me. I could literally see one of my key scenes unfolding in my mind. It was like being given a key to this world I had been circling and spying on for so long. Suddenly, I could walk with my character through the streets of my story. Amazingly, when my husband heard the same song later, he had the same experience. For weeks I’d been talking about this world, about this character, bouncing ideas off of him, and this song triggered the same emotions in him as it did in me. Now I could not only visualize my world, I could hear it too. And in the space of one song, my story had come to life.
Posted in Characters, First draft, Writing
i remember my first high school alien crush. the memories are still bittersweet.
this is an amazing post, and it made me remember why i love listening to music so much while i work. and i’m so glad you found sigur ros! it sounds exactly like your book :)
I love this post. I listen to music constantly, and it informs me whenever I am creating…not matter if it is design, writing, baking or something else.
Also, I ADORE Sigur Rós! If you haven’t heard it, check out the lead singer Jonsi’s solo album GO. It’s equally fantastic. It’s more upbeat than Sigur Rós’ stuff, while still sounding epic.
I _have_ heard GO and I love it! One of Jonsi’s songs is the credit music to How To Train a Dragon… which I also love:) So I became a fan. It’s actually most likely how I found my way to Sigur Ros, now that I think about it.
GO is a little too upbeat for writing to and some of the words are in English, so that doesn’t quite work for me. But it’d perfect for baking an epic pie;) By the way, I always try to put on appropriate accompany music whenever I’m cooking something. So it’ll be infused with just the right flavors:)
I love this tip – finding the music for each book really gets me in the mental place for writing it – I love knowing that it’s something other writers do as well! There’s a tone thing that when you nail it, it’s so great… And funny, I’ve found I listen to the same song so many times, just to get myself back in that space!
Thanks for sharing this, (and now I have to go listen to some Sigur Ros to see what you’re up to!)
Namaste,
Lee
The tone of one song totally helps me write the short story. Funny thing is, the stories are too much alike. :o) Now I know I need a different song for each one.
Thank you so much.
Monique… I love this idea that listening to the same song while writing would produce the same story:) I bet it’s a wonderful story though and a wonderful tone!
Oh my goodness . . . I cannot write without the soundtrack to my novel playing! And I post-process photos to music, too! It’s just like Lee said, above: when the tone of what you’re creating matches the tone in the music, you feel it. (It definitely affects how the photos turn out!!)
I love the idea of music doing the same for pies and cookies, too. Mmm. It only makes sense!!
Nice! I am totally going to check out Sigur Ros. My two new bands are The National & Bon Iver. Music=Love
When I was in Iceland it totally reminded me of Sigur Ros. I guess that makes sense right?
The other day I visited the Antelope Valley Poppy Reserve. This is pretty much a stretch of hills in the middle of nowhere that is blanketed in orange poppies.
It’s an incredible sight, reminiscent of the Wizard of Oz, with orange colored fields stretching into the distance. But the stunning thing to me is that this is all happening in what is essentially a desert. Silvery green sagebrush breaks up the vivid flowers. Tumbleweeds come rolling at you up across the landscape. And rattlesnakes sun themselves on the sandy path.
It amazed me that, in what should be a sparse landscape, such beauty and vibrancy could be found. The plant that fascinated me the most was the false dandelion. It was instantly recognizable as similar to the puffballs we’re used to. But this ‘dandelion’ was shimmery and structured, almost looking like it was made out of glass or quartz crystals. I bent down to study it and hesitantly reached out to touch it, certain the flower would be barbed or sharp. But it was sleek and silky.
The wind was so fierce that it hurt my eardrums. You could lean into it and let it hold you up, imagining you were flying out over the orange hills. But even in that exhilarating, buffeting wind that swept across the landscape, this ‘dandelion’ remained intact. Waiting.
But what was it waiting for? Just the right current of air to blast a seed off of it? Was it waiting for rain? Or the right temperature? I guess in the desert, you have to be sure of your moment.
And I suppose the same is true for a story. The landscape around us is often a bit harsh. If we aren’t careful, we can be swept up in hurricanes of criticism and doubt and cautionary voices. And if we do, we run the risk of our story falling on gritty, dry land.
So while we are crafting each crystalline seedpod, we must shield our stories. We must hold them close and muffle the noise of the wind whipping past. We must build the story as strong as we can and hold tight. This is challenging enough as it is, but then there is a trickier bit.
We must wait.
How can we be sure when it’s the right time to share our stories with others? We can’t. Somewhere there is a balance between giving your story to trusted readers and patiently allowing the story to grow in the protected alcove of your imagination. By letting it go too early, you risk the wind smashing your dandelion apart. But if you never let the story go, it will never take root.
In this dance of risk and trust, each of us has to figure out the timing we feel comfortable with. When to take shelter and when to share. But the most important thing to remember is that even in the desert, lovely things grow.
Posted in Nifty happenings, Writing
Beautiful post, Sara! I have to visit that field (maybe in a few weeks??!!!) & I adore the analogy to writing a new book.
Thanks! I think the poppies might be gone by then, Edith:P But we’ll have to check!
wow – that was beautiful. the photos, the metaphor, the lesson.
thank you for sharing.
Namaste and a Hug,
Lee
Thanks! The poppies were _gorgeous_:) Right now I’m wishing I could go back there and hike through them again. But I guess I have to wait till next year!
This has been a hard news week. Devastating oil spills, racist laws, memories of Kent State, and tragic flooding in Nashville. Sitting isolated at my desk, I start to question the worth of what I do. When the real world seems to be falling apart around us, does it make sense to turn to fiction?
And the only answer I can come up with is, yes. Yes it does.
Because the only thing I know what to do with my despair and uncertainty is turn to the page. I put my questions down sentence by bewildered sentence. Hoping my characters will be able to find meaning in all this ugliness and create something hopeful with it.
Fiction is our way of making sense of things in a world that doesn’t make sense. In imaginary worlds, we can talk about issues in a context that seems safer than our everyday life. And, in a story, the world must have consistent rules and satisfying, if not hopeful, endings.
Discussing difficult issues has long been the domain of science fiction and, at times, fantasy. It’s no accident that Star Trek had the first interracial kiss on TV. Or that the show has often explored gender roles in both work and love. That distance of time and space allow us, as a culture, to discuss issues that are too difficult in reality.
So when I despair over whether we as a species, a culture, a community will ever grow out of our small-mindedness… Or when I wonder whether we will destroy ourselves before we learn how to take care of our planet… Or life simply seems too cruel…then I let my doubts play themselves out on the page. I give smart, brave characters the same fears I’m struggling with, the same obstacles, and trust that they will find a way out. Through this process I feel the characters’ pain and their doubts, but I also feel something else. Hope.
As a reader or a writer, when I turn to the page, I find hope there. Hope as I watch characters fight to survive whatever is thrown at them. Hope as they find solutions in spite of themselves, in spite of their situations. And I bring that hope back with me. Through the page. Into the world. And then I hold on tight.
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I remember once, a long time ago, when my brother told me he planned to join the Peace Corps and then work for the Center for Disease Control (CDC). I was like, “Center for Disease Control?! What good is that?? What the world needs now is more fiction!”
My brother looked at me and was like, “Oh my —.”
I was kidding, of course, in so far as I was trying to rile him up. But I wasn’t kidding, too. :)
Whenever I really doubt the strength of fiction, I think about the books that affected me and how drastically they influenced the path I’ve taken:)
Great post. And so true. When our characters do something amazing we believe we can too.
Awesome post Sara! I suddenly feel so purposeful & bright!
I love this post. Once again, you’ve stated it beautifully. I love that bit about how we bring hope back from fiction into the real world, into our lives. That’s so right on!
You ROCK!
Namaste,
Lee
Thanks guys:) The oil spill is still all over the news and now reaching the shore. In the midst of this, I still stand by the post, but I want to be out there helping as well!
This weekend I had the privilege of hearing Kate DiCamillo (Because of Winn-Dixie and The Tale of Despereaux) speak at the LA Times Festival of Books. She was one of those wonderful authors whose real-world presence is exactly the same as her writing presence. She speaks with the same quiet, humorous confidence that comes across in her books.
During the question and answer segment, a boy got up and asked her, “Why do your books always have sad endings?” Then he listed off the melancholy endings of book after book.
“Well, when you put it like that…” Kate laughed with the audience, looking a little sheepish. Then she took a minute to really think about the question. She went on to explain that she didn’t mean to write sad endings, but that life is full of the sad as well as the beautiful, and she tries to write what is in life.
This was a big difference from Meg Cabot (The Princess Diaries) who also talked about the sadness of life in her dynamic speech. But Meg Cabot’s answer to this uncomfortable truth about life, and especially childhood, is to write ‘pretty things.’ She said she wants strong girls and glitter and prettiness as an escape from what might be the bleakness of real life.
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found these differing answers to the same truth fascinating. And cleary, judging by the popularity of both their books, both are needed in our world, often by the same readers. Sometimes I want to read a world that has beauty and sadness that reflects our own, but whose stories often make more sense than the seeming randomness of our own lives. But other times, I want to escape, with glitter or dirigibles or princesses, to a world totally unrecognizable from mine.
What struck me the most in these two talks was that both writers, so different in their styles, their presentations, their books, knew why they wrote what they wrote. They were compelled by their subjects and it was this compulsion that led to the confidence in their speaking and in their writing.
Perhaps that is something it takes years to develop. Not just the courage to get your words down on the page or to stand up in front of readers, but a certainty in what you choose to write. Perhaps it is this, more than tears or glitter, that invites us into these authors’ stories. That, word-by-word, builds their worlds around us. And it’s this confidence that makes us want to stay.
Posted in Authors, I heart this book, Nifty happenings, Writing
A nice, thoughtful look at two successful children’s authors and some of the reasons for their popularity. Somebody was really taking what she heard to heart! Thanks for sharing, Sara.
Thank you for your thoughts. I had to miss both of those speakers, so this is invaluable!
Great post and a great day at the Festival of Books! Also interesting was knowing why they loved to read. Meg said she read as a child to escape some heaviness at home.
And Kate, as a sickly child, also read to escape.
So knowing why you write what you write has a strong connection to why you read what you read as a kid.
Pretty cool stuff. ; )
Suzanne, that is totally true. I’ve heard so many people say that they write the books they would have loved to have read as a child, but couldn’t find. I take comfort in knowing that a lot more stories are out there for kids to read now. I also like the idea that being certain in what you write is the same as being certain in what you read. And also knowing that both of those can surprise you:)
Wow. This post lines up a lot with my thinking lately. Thanks, Sara!
“Just Because” is not an adequate answer for anything. It wasn’t enough when you were four and really wanted Cookie Crisp cereal instead of Rice Krispies. It’s not enough when someone expects you to go along with something, “Because that’s just the way it is.” And it’s never going to be enough of a reason for something to happen in a book.
This week I read a story where the main character has supernatural insight into the life of a long-dead character. In this book, dreams revealed a secondary storyline that was fascinating and mesmerizing. But not once did the main character wonder why they were having the dreams. Nor did the characters around him, who he shared the dreams with, ask that question either. And not once did anyone wonder if the dreams were real. And while I was intrigued by this unusual plot, I couldn’t help thinking that there was a big “Just Because” involved.
Writers run into this problem a lot in their stories. You want the story to fork this way, so the character makes that decision. The character needs to be outside for this scene so, of course, that has to happen. And these artificial plot-turns jump out at the reader. In fact, they wave red flags and wear gold lamé and shout ‘Hey! Heeeeeeey! I don’t belong!” And most of the time, you, as a writer, know it.
And so, when your critique group or editor asks, “Why does your character decide to do that?” You put your head in your hands and groan. Because you thought, just this once, you could get away with it. And you have no idea how to fix the problem.
But often these Just Because moments open a door for you. They force you to delve deeper into you character and deeper into your story. What if your story didn’t take that fork, but took the other? What if your character stayed inside the house? What would happen then? It forces you to stop and listen to all of your characters. To look at where your story is going and, more importantly, why it’s going there. And when you do this, you find out that your story and characters have something to say, not just to your audience, but to you too.
So I wonder about this book I read. It was complex and rich, but what if someone along the way had asked the author, “Why is the boy having these dreams? What is happening here that is allowing this connection to happen? Is it magic? Are they real?” And what if the characters themselves had asked these same questions? Maybe the author would have discovered something they didn’t know about their story. Maybe, we as readers, might feel a little more satisfied at the end. And maybe the two plots, instead of looping artfully around each other, would have braided and twined together to create one strong, inseparable story.
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I agree–readers aren’t stupid. Just like sci-fi, fantasy and vampire stories all have to explain their rules and then stick to them, so do all stories have to make clear _why_. Or not. In Act 5, Gertrude drinks the poison intended for Hamlet. Why? I’ve been teaching it for a decade, reading it for longer, and I can’t decisively arrive at a conclusion. Strangely, it only makes me look for more clues the next time I read it. Or wish to heck Shakespeare had left behind some friggin’ journals. Alas…
Interesting thought… that the lack of explanation can make us think harder. I’m with you on this with some stories. Like in magical realism… often times the author never addresses whether magic is really happening or not. That is for you, as a reader, to decide. But other times, it’s just laziness, hoping that the reader with go with you wherever you are going, even if you don’t fully build the bridge for them to get there.
Sometimes in setting up a world you can get away with it–but I think you’re right that it’ll probably always enrich the story if you answer “why.”
Great post – and I gotta give it up to you for finding an actual Star Trek red flags and gold lame image! Wow!
Namaste and a Hug,
Lee
Such a great post. I’m dealing with about 1,000 Jut Becauses right now. Your post gives me hope that in the end, giving them all a “why” will pay off. ; )
Thanks! Yeah… those questions kinda make it uncomfortable to write, but they do make it interesting:)
Last week, we got a new puppy! Huzzah! Four-month-old Kitsu is adorable and fox-like and endlessly entertaining. But as I’ve watched her stalking dust bunnies, pouncing on shadows, and chasing her tail, I’ve been forcefully reminded of my own writing process.
See, during the past months of revision, I daydreamed about starting a new story. I’d sit next to a waterlily-filled pond somewhere, seized by inspiration, scribbling down long, brilliant paragraphs. (Why a pond? Especially since Laptop+Water= Tragedy) Anyway, my thoughts would weave themselves together, creating a manuscript with a beginning you couldn’t put down, an intriguing middle, AND a surprising, yet inevitable ending.
Instead, I’ve found the process of writing a first draft just like I remembered it, clumsy and full of doubt. And clumsy isn’t fun. Surprisingly, neither is doubt.
And suddenly, I wished I was revising again. In hindsight, revision seems like strolling through a lovely greenhouse, rearranging plants, watering this one here, pruning that one there. Now, I find myself back on a dusty plain with a handful of seeds and a empty watering can. True, I can create whatever I want in this vast open space, but first I have to find some water, figure out what kind of seeds I have, and get digging. All of this is awkward, hard work that leaves your hands calloused and caked with mud.

Wow. Sorry, I guess I got a little carried away with myself there. Plus now, I have two competing metaphors. Puppies and gardening. Hmmm… better throw in a third one, just for good measure.
Vroom! Meep, Meep!
Right now, in the middle of my first draft, I can hear the Road Runner, I can see him, but he just keeps racing in dizzying circles around me. For the last few weeks, I’ve been forging ahead anyway. Since I know my beginning and I know my ending, surely I can find a path between the two points. But somewhere in the middle there, the story gets boring. And I’ve learned to heed the warning signs. When you sit down to write a scene and you think to yourself, ‘Ugh!’ then whoever reads it is going to think ‘Ugh!’ too.
I’ve figured out that something is missing in my story and it’s as elusive and taunting as the Road Runner himself. But this morning and
every morning, I will sit down at my computer and start again, creating contraptions, building traps, and scheming new schemes. After all, I’m Wile E. Coyote, Suuuuuper Gen-i-us and I’m bound to catch him sometime, right?
Right?
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Ha ha! Very funny. I feel like I’m chasing my tail with the first draft of my WIP right now too. Maybe a greenhouse is what I need. Kitsu is adorable.
Thanks:) She’s definitely stolen our hearts. Peggy, I wish less chasing of our tails and more mice catching for us both. Figuratively, of course:)
In my version of Looney Toons, Wile E. Coyote catches the Road Runner and Sylvester eats Tweety Bird. ;)
Awwww, what a perfect end image!
I love the writing/gardening metaphor! The grass is always greener on the other side: except in your version, one side is a desert and one a greenhouse. What a fun place this is.
I dreamed of dogs because of you. In real life I’m not comfortable around them, but the premise of the dream was that I loved them and that, in fact, all these dogs in my house were mine. So I was going up to them, making myself pet them and say their names and not be afraid of these hyperactive creatures–reminding myself they were mine–wondering why I felt so weird.
Right!
Sara – this was great! You sure do know how to wield a metaphor, and you somehow always manage to make it about writing. Wow. I wish I knew how you did that. Love the video and photo of kitsu…
Namaste and a Hug,
Lee
I wanted to let you know that I gave you the “One Lovely Blog Award” today. :)